The Panics
Aug. 26th, 2011 05:32 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
opera142The Panics are rising. My most recent way of keeping them at bay -- this is not a first draft concern-- isn't valid anymore, as I'm in editing mode. So, I'm listing them with the hopes of leaving them here so that I can have a decent run during my writing session tomorrow.
In no particular order:
Too many metaphors and similes? I'm a raccoon of ineptness pawing through the garbage can of picturesque speech. Hundreds of metaphors lay dying in fields of text like so many civil war cosplayers cos-paying the ultimate price on a fairgrounds Gettysberg. Yeah.
The voice of the story, the "twang" I like to call it, went wonky. At first, it was so honey-on-biscuits. Now, it's overworked, overbaked Perkins muffin. Where did the lovely not-drawl go?
Is AJ coming off as holier-than-thou? Judgemental? willing to blame everyone but himself?
Too much internal dialogue/flashbacks, which also means too much telling instead of showing?
Is this a story, or am I trying to gussy up a slice of life? Ugh.
In no particular order:
Too many metaphors and similes? I'm a raccoon of ineptness pawing through the garbage can of picturesque speech. Hundreds of metaphors lay dying in fields of text like so many civil war cosplayers cos-paying the ultimate price on a fairgrounds Gettysberg. Yeah.
The voice of the story, the "twang" I like to call it, went wonky. At first, it was so honey-on-biscuits. Now, it's overworked, overbaked Perkins muffin. Where did the lovely not-drawl go?
Is AJ coming off as holier-than-thou? Judgemental? willing to blame everyone but himself?
Too much internal dialogue/flashbacks, which also means too much telling instead of showing?
Is this a story, or am I trying to gussy up a slice of life? Ugh.
