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Choose three completed stories you've done, and list at least one thing about each you wish you would've done differently when you wrote it.
Green-Eyed Monster . Had it beta'd hardcore. It's been one of my most widely recced fics, esp. outside of wrestling fandom, so I guess it works. But I've always wondered about flashbacks. There are several thoughout the story and they're pretty tangled with the story's current time frame.
It was beta'd, and at the time, I asked if there was any confusion. I got a "no" and I moved on. But, I think writers travel a path, and at the beginning of the journey, a beta is more a reassurance thing. Writers want to hear they've done well. Whew! It's readable. Someone liked it. Yay, As skills progress, writers want more suggestions for fine tuning. Merely readable isn't enough. When I wrote Green-Eyed Monster I was very much in the "relieve me" stage. So while it's been one of my more successful fics, I still wonder about it.
The King . Wrote it better. Edited it ruthlessly. It wasn't my first epic, but it is the longest thing I've written. And, unfortunately, most of the length is due to ghastly writing. It's nanowrimo-riffic in its bloatedness. Clumsy, inefficent, dull- to-read writing such as "the beard on my face", "the dress she was wearing.", "I gave her a smile", "I touched hiim with my hand".
Along with the bad writing is a plodding story. The POV character didn't have a lot of leeway to act on situations so too much of the story was him listening to storys other people told. Events were almost always second hand, off-stage, or at best, overheard. Not dramatic at all.
It didn't help that I was crazy in love in with the little world I made. Of course every sentence uttered by every character was necessary for the story. Of course lots of pointless backstory was necessary. Of course all the villiain were obsessed with Matthew.
I've been re-writing the thing since January, and wow. Sludge, sludge, sludge. At times, I doubt if it can be salvaged; the basic parts of the story are that rickety. But, I'm still a little bit crazy in love with the thing, so I doubt I'll leave it to rot.
With the Light Shining In Your Eyes . Better title, omg. It's a good little story. Same universe as The Prince and The King but concerning different characters. I had been listening to "As long as you follow" by Fleetwood Mac because the song fit the story to a T. Choosing a lyric from the song seemed a no brainer. I just chose the melodramatic phrase possible. Still love the story, though.
Green-Eyed Monster . Had it beta'd hardcore. It's been one of my most widely recced fics, esp. outside of wrestling fandom, so I guess it works. But I've always wondered about flashbacks. There are several thoughout the story and they're pretty tangled with the story's current time frame.
It was beta'd, and at the time, I asked if there was any confusion. I got a "no" and I moved on. But, I think writers travel a path, and at the beginning of the journey, a beta is more a reassurance thing. Writers want to hear they've done well. Whew! It's readable. Someone liked it. Yay, As skills progress, writers want more suggestions for fine tuning. Merely readable isn't enough. When I wrote Green-Eyed Monster I was very much in the "relieve me" stage. So while it's been one of my more successful fics, I still wonder about it.
The King . Wrote it better. Edited it ruthlessly. It wasn't my first epic, but it is the longest thing I've written. And, unfortunately, most of the length is due to ghastly writing. It's nanowrimo-riffic in its bloatedness. Clumsy, inefficent, dull- to-read writing such as "the beard on my face", "the dress she was wearing.", "I gave her a smile", "I touched hiim with my hand".
Along with the bad writing is a plodding story. The POV character didn't have a lot of leeway to act on situations so too much of the story was him listening to storys other people told. Events were almost always second hand, off-stage, or at best, overheard. Not dramatic at all.
It didn't help that I was crazy in love in with the little world I made. Of course every sentence uttered by every character was necessary for the story. Of course lots of pointless backstory was necessary. Of course all the villiain were obsessed with Matthew.
I've been re-writing the thing since January, and wow. Sludge, sludge, sludge. At times, I doubt if it can be salvaged; the basic parts of the story are that rickety. But, I'm still a little bit crazy in love with the thing, so I doubt I'll leave it to rot.
With the Light Shining In Your Eyes . Better title, omg. It's a good little story. Same universe as The Prince and The King but concerning different characters. I had been listening to "As long as you follow" by Fleetwood Mac because the song fit the story to a T. Choosing a lyric from the song seemed a no brainer. I just chose the melodramatic phrase possible. Still love the story, though.
